The spread of multinational companies and the resulting increase of globalization produce positive effects for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree.
Since the World Trade Organisation (WTO)
has been
founded, all Wrong verb form
was
countries
are
tightened Verb problem
have
by
trading in terms of multinational companies. Change preposition
apply
While
Some people support that increasing globalisation is beneficial for everybody, I tend to agree with the given statement and believe that this
trend not only brings pros but also
has cons to the whole society.
On the one hand, the spread of multinationals indeed produces considerable advantages to
all individuals. An apparent example can be seen from a healthy economy which generates higher salaries for all citizens Change preposition
for
as a result
of globalisation. In addition
, another consequence is that the
economic progress ensures governments can have more funds to spend on infrastructure construction Correct article usage
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such
as public transportation, health care system, education system and environmental protection. Alternatively, rising numbers of multinational sectors provide more job opportunities for all workers in a country. To sum up
, the living standard of the whole country can be improved due to
the increasing number of this
type of corporations
.
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corporation
On the other hand
, admittedly, more international firms, more
drawbacks to particular groups. Add a missing verb
have more
For instance
, environmentalists would face challenges by the destruction of the ecosystem and global warming. Those are the negative results of globalisation, as countries
have greater numbers of exports and imports that need huge energies to deliver to other countries
. Thus
, there is a rocketing need for fossil fuels, such
as petroleum and coal, which will emit greenhouse gases and lead to the melting of a glacier in polar areas. I am not optimistic that human
can deal with even a small rise in sea level well. Millions of people would be flooded, especially in coastal areas, and they would lose their jobs, homes, and even life. The potential Fix the agreement mistake
humans
of
famine and Change preposition
for
spread
of disease is huge for those residents, which could lead to social instability. Correct article usage
the spread
Moreover
, on the side of economics, trades
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trade
create
surplus and deficit Correct subject-verb agreement
creates
countries
. For latter
, they would face the problem of unemployment and money outflows Correct article usage
the latter
as a result
of a failure in competitions
with other products, which is harmful to Fix the agreement mistake
competition
countries
’ trading power ,international strength and domestic economic growth.
In conclusion, I believe that increasing numbers of multinational corporations can produce positive impacts on everyone,
but Remove the comma
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accompanied
by growing deleterious influences on the whole Add a missing verb
are accompanied
society
.Change preposition
of society
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