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All over the world, the number of overweight people is growing. What do you feel are the main causes of this? What are the effects?

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It is observed that more and more
people
 have put on weight around the world. There are ample reasons accounting for
this
 phenomenon including unbalanced diet, lacking exercises and growing stress. Not only does obesity do harm to
people
's health, but
also
 it laggers the economic development of society. Causes for the fatness derive from many aspects.
Firstly
, an increasing number of
people
 are addicted to junk food
such
 as hamburgers and sweet drinks because
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these are widely sold at low prices in chain stores over the world.
People
 are so occupied with their jobs or study that they have no time to prepare homemade food while eating out is much more convenient.
Sencondly
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Secondly
,
commercial
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 advertisement for snacks with high
carories
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calories
 is everywhere, which prompts both adults and children to consume
these unhealthy food
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.
Thirdly
, everyone can not help eating unhealthily to cheer themselves up when they are in bad mood or under enormous pressure in
this
 competitive world.
Last
 but not least, it is not easy for
people
 to make up their mind and go exercising nowadays after a long day's hark work or tender learning. The popularity of obesity might affect
people
' health as well as the economic growth of society.
To begin
 with, fatness comes with many
comodities
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commodities
 including high pressure, diabetes and vascular disease which are chronic and cost a lot. What is more, if these overweight
people
 take days off frequently to see a doctor or even get hospitalized, the work productivity will suffer and the social welfare system will face a huge challenge. In conclusion, several main factors contribute to the rising amount of overweight individuals, which result in poor health and hinder economic progression.
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