Everyone should be encouraged to use fewer resources rather than recycle more. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Resources
is an important wealth of our world. Lesser use of
resources
is mandatory to prevent depletion of
resources
. Some people will argue that
,
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we should recycle the
resources
rather than using less. I partially agree
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the given above notion. There
are
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plethora
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of natural
resources
available,
for
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solar energy, fossil energy, electrical energy etc. All
this
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natural
resources
are important in our daily life, but the major concern about
this
naturally
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resources
is that
this
resource
are
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getting depleted. Not all the
resources
are recyclable or renewable. So in
such
cases
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we need to save our
resources
to prevent our world. Using less
non renewable
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resources
will help our upcoming generation.
On the other hand
, recycling is
also
important to generate renewable
resources
.
For instance
, recycling steel and other metals will help to save
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resources
. So it' is important to use
less
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resources
as well as to recycle
the
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things to save our world . To sum up, In my
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we should
we should
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use
less
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resources
as many are
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resources
but for protecting
environment
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we
also
should focus on
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eco friendly
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materials. Both recycling and less using of
resources
is an important part and everyone should be encouraged to do both
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an equal manner.
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