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Many aspects of culture and people's lifestyle are becoming increasingly similar throughout the world. Although this trend has some benefits, I would agree that the disadvantages are more noteworthy.

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Globalisation has allowed
people
 to adopt a homogeneous
culture
 in terms of entertainment, fashion and other areas as
such
.
However
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 there are some
people
 who believe
such
 uniformity isn’t very beneficial.
This
 essay shall discuss
further
 both the sides of
this
 phenomenon. Having the same kind of preferences helps
people
 get around the world very easily. If we watch TV shows or adverts of a certain
country
 we get familiar with a summary of its
culture
, thereby making it easier for us to blend in there. The more we get to know about each other, the more can the differences between countries be eliminated making the world a huge harmonious community. We are no longer restricted to brands of our own
country
 but are exposed to international products and services. Following a global fashion trend shall make you feel and act more naturally with the
people
 anywhere in the world without being too obvious. The
people
 who do not support
such
 a development are the ones who feel a
country
’s own ethnicity will be lost if the
people
 try to adopt the prevailing global
culture
 a little more than required. Watching TV shows or movies from a foreign
country
 may influence and alter the mannerisms of the
people
 of the home
country
. Some cultures are very rigid when it comes to clothing and the acceptance of universal fashion trends
therefore
 will not be received well.
Although
, I feel these are minor issues in comparison to the host of advantages that we have regarding
this
. One’s own ethnicity can be followed regardless of the TV shows we watch or the clothes we wear. To conclude, I agree that the advantages of the phenomenon of having a uniform
culture
 worldwide outweigh the disadvantages. Every subject has pros and cons, and the cons here can be ignored easily, especially when
such
 an acceptance makes life easier.
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