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People living in the 21st century have a better quality of life than the previous centuries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The issue of whether the quality of
life
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 in the parent’s generation is worse than that in
today’s
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 developed world has been a subject of debate.
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 some argue that living in the past’s condition has more advantages than
today’s
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life
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. Personally, I totally agree with the view that living in the 21st century is better than in the previous centuries. On the one hand,
today’s
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 quality of
life
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 has been enhanced significantly and brought many advantages. Thanks to the development of technology, humans are currently having a chance to live in a modern environment with comprehensive growth. Take online courses as an example, it provides a learning environment that encourages two-way communication and active participation just by using technological devices and an internet connection.
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, it is evident that the economic circumstances in the past ages were less developed compared to
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 fast-paced world.
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, many issues remained unsolved until the appearance of contemporary industry which has affected many
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 aspects.
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, the highlight of
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 issue is the inconvenience in transportation because the advancement of public transport was literally absent.
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, most people in their parent’s generation had to walk from home to school a long distance. In conclusion,
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 I support the view that the current century is a more livable environment, I still believe that we should build upon the experiences established by the previous generations to contribute to
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 society's progress.
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Ensure to elaborate more fully on the advantages of modern life versus past centuries for a more well-rounded perspective.
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Try to connect your ideas more smoothly by using a range of cohesive devices. This can help in making your essay more coherent and improve the flow.
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You have made a cogent argument, but providing more specific data or examples can potentially strengthen your essay.
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The essay starts with a clear introduction that outlines the key points to be discussed.
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Your main points are supported with relevant examples, which adds credibility to your arguments.
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The conclusion effectively summarizes the opinions presented and adds a thoughtful remark about learning from past experiences.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancements
  • Healthcare improvements
  • Economic growth
  • Social changes
  • Global connectivity
  • Standard of living
  • Life expectancy
  • Gender equality
  • Legal rights
  • Globalization
  • Cultural exchange
  • Access to information
  • Environmental concerns
  • Sustainable development
  • Stress levels
  • Quality of life
  • Medical progress
  • Job opportunities
  • Income disparity
  • Life satisfaction
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