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Universities should accept equal members of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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I had just returned home from an exciting trip to
Australia
 and visiting the National
Museum
 of
Australia
 was one of the fabulous activities of
this
 tour. I cannot wait to share my experience with you. We stay in
Australia
 for a week and on our
second
 day, we went to the National
Museum
 of
Australia
, located on Acton Peninsula, in Canberra. The
museum
's innovative use of new technologies is unprecedented.
Initially
, I thought that it's not going to be a fun time but I actually got fascinated by the nice collection the
museum
 has. I remember that
this
 kind of activity blows your mind away. You would quite enjoy the
museum
's stunning architecture that offers an extraordinary opportunity to explore the rich and diverse stories of
Australia
 and its people. From pre-colonial settlement to modern
Australia
, the
museum
 has it all. You would
also
 enjoy the Pearling exhibition from a historical perspective. The experience would be quite stunning. I wished you had been with me there. I would absolutely recommend you visit
this
museum
 whenever possible. I would like to meet you soon and tell you stories about my tour. Take care. Yours truly, Anjali
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