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Governments should spend more money on education than on recreation and sport. Do you agree or disagree?

#governments #money #education #recreation #sport
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The focus of
state
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the state
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 should be on
quality
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education
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 rather than wasting funds on extra
carriculum
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curriculum
curricular
activities
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. I totally agree with
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, as in my opinion at the end what matters most, is the knowledge and qualification, a person is having. I will
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 discuss the facts that are the causes of my agreement with the above statement. Our country
need
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needs
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 more
education
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 due to high
illlitracy
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illiteracy
 rate. More and more people
now a days
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nowadays
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 are unable to give
quality
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education
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 to there children due to high expenses.
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, a survey conducted in Pakistan showed that the
illlitracy
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illiteracy
 rate in Pakistan is more than 59% in total. Under
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 circumstances,
education
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 is of much priority than leisure
activities
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. I would recommend that
government
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the government
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 should introduce free
quality
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education
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 and more
need based
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need-based
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scolarships
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scholarships
 for the student that urge for it. Sports and other extra
carriculum
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curriculum
curricular
activities
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 are good to keep fit and
healty
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healthy
 but
lack
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 of it will not put
much
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 drastic effects on humanity.
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,
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lack
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a lack
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 of
education
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 can bring serious problems that can be a hurdle in the progress of a country.
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, as the
corona virus
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coronavirus
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 hits the globe, all sports
activities
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 stopped but it doesn't
effect
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affect
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 the world. Whereas, people with no
education
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 or
unawerness
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unawareness
 of technology run out of jobs.
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, The
govenment
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government
 that was unable to spend on online
education
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 in time got really
crticised
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criticised
criticized
 by its people, because the precious time of students was wasted
alot
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a lot
 by not giving exams on time. In conclusion, The state should focus on
quality
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education
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, rather
tha
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than
 on extra
carriculum
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curriculum
curricular
activities
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. I totally agree with
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 statement as the
lack
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 of sports cannot have drastic effects but
lack
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 of
quality
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education
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 can be a great hurdle in the progress of a country.
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, I would recommend that
governement
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government
 should spend more funds on
quality
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education
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 by introducing more and more scholarships and
also
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 by giving free
education
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 to deserving students.
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