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Some educationalists think that international exchange visits will benefits teenagers at school. To what extend the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#educationalists #exchange #visits #teenagers #school
today's
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 era, education is one of the best
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towards
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 our reach
life
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. we all know that birds without wings. so in
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present
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 day, some
reasearcher
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researcher
researchers
 claim that
foriegn
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foreign
 education exchange visit will
usefull
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useful
 for
teenages
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teenagers
 at school.
i
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 strongly agree that international sharing study more merits rather than demerits. in the
first
 advantages , teenagers
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 knowing new things and they could apply in their
life
 in
different
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 way .
for instance
 , some students get a job and they will put hole
afforts
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efforts
affords
 in their career than they
fulfill
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 our
goals
.
secondly
, teenager
make
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a
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 independent they
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right
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the right
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 things in their
life
 and
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myriad
 solve
problem
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the problem
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 without any
hegitated
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hesitated
hesitate
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on the other hand
 same
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disadvantages
, some children
is
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 doing work or some other things without knowing their parents and they feel like no one can
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interfere
 in their goat
goals
life
.
for example
 , some students choose their career without any parents and close aquiratance . they will go online searches some
their
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 fields and determine
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goals
. to put it in a nutshell ,
i
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 pen down saying that international visit is the best choices for
growing
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 generation with some limited rules and regulation . some
goverment
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government
 give permission
visit
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to visit
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 other
conuntry
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country
 for education .
i
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 think more prons rather than cons.
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