Many people play sport when they are young, but then stop when they become adults. Why do so many adults stop doing physical exercise? What can be done to solve this problem?

It is generally thought that most
of
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the
people
tend to play any
sport
in their younger ages,
however
, as they grow up, they halt doing
exercise
in today's complex society.
Although
there will undoubtedly be some prime reasons why
people
stop working out when they get older, societies can take steps to mitigate
this
potential problem. As time goes on, humans start to become older and it has a considerable influence on their
sport
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activities.
Thus
, several related problems can be anticipated.
First
and foremost, it has been argued that age could probably cause
people
to halt working out.
For example
, those who are used to play
sport
get some cuts and bruise, say, in the late
30's
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or
40's
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,
this
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injuries take a long time to recover.
As a result
of
this
, it sometimes
deviate
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people
from doing
exercise
again because of
this
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injuries. Another key sticking factor can be thought that
people
would possibly lack
of
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motivation to do
exercise
when they get adults. In order to continue playing
sport
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, you should be a big fan of
this
kind of
sport
. Football is the best illustration of
this
.
However
, there are various steps that communities along with governments could take to tackle these hurdles.
Firstly
, a simple solution would be to build the sports ground in the parks by the government. It ought to be suitable not only
young
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generation
,
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but
also
elderly
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people
. It is because they need to be encouraged to do
exercise
. A
second
measure might be considered that different types of
sport
competition for the older can be held by communities. Without any doubt,
such
sport
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activities would draw adults' attention, who are interested in sports.
For instance
, every year in Italy, bungee jumping is held for adventurous persons. In conclusion, various measures
such
as competitions, installing
sport
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equipments
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in the parks can be taken to tackle the problems that are certain to arise as
people
get older. It is predicted that governments are preparing
promoting
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projects to attract
older
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nation to do
exercise
in the near future.
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