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Globalization has brought about more positive economic impacts than negative ones. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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In recent decades,
globalization
 brings more and more trading opportunities between counties around the
world
. Some people might say that it gives many positive effects on the global economy.
However
, another group of people holds the opposite opinion. In my point of view, I believe that the
globalization
 has given more disadvantages than advantages and I will illustrate my opinion in
this
 essay. In the ideal situation,
globalization
 is a benefit for our society because it can promote global specialization. The global specialization means that all
countries
 focus on producing the products which they are sophisticated.
Thus
, all counties can enjoy the products with the best quality and the lowest price. So as the example above, the
globalization
 can stimulate the productivity of the whole
world
 can bring many benefits for us.
In contrast
, in real condition, the image above is difficult to come true. For getting profit, some large
countries
 will use some unprincipled methods to monopolize the global market which is harmful to the economy of many small
countries
 during the
globalization
. The dumping,
for instance
, is one of the immoral methods which means sell the enormous number of commodities at a super low price.
Although
this
 action may lead to loss of money at begin, it will kill all producers at that time and
this
 country can monopolize
this
 industry. Meanwhile, it
also
 harmful to the employment rate of a country when every product has been specialised. Because the job opportunities may flow to other
countries
 with lower wages paying for labour. As the result, the
globalization
 makes more disadvantages on our
world
 in the real situation. In conclusion, all the about demonstrates the
globalization
 has brought more disadvantage for our
world
, especially for some small
countries
.
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