prevention is better than cure. Reseaching and treating disease is always costly so it would be better to invest in the preventative measure. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

Investment in precautions always thought to be the best way of saving huge
money
which has been invested in treating and researching any diseases as it says “Prevention is better than Cure”. I completely agree with
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saying and
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, it has always been expensive to treat any new ailment due to the fact it required huge resources and time which could wisely
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in preventing measures. Every nation every year hire many scientists to work on new diseases so they can set
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history. But without them knowing some minor illness can simply be treated by taking some preventions. To illustrate that, in 2019 companies all around the globe invested enormous
money
just to come
first
in the COVID-19 vaccination race. Undoubtedly, preventions
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one of the effective methods in some cases because it makes people aware and
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the danger before it takes place. Traditionally, people believe in taking precautions rather than depending on the medicines which
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even useful in some situations like if you have cold or pain in
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it is suggested to drink ginger tea or rest at home and simply doing that people not only saving
money
but
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their health from taking scientific tablets. To Conclude, investing in treating disease not only cost us
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time but
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some significant cure steps we could easily save our health and recourses.
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have faith in precautions rather than depending so much on medicines.
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