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“Prevention is better than cure”. Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. To what extent do you agree?

#“prevention #cure” #diseases #measures
Some people believe that researching illnesses and curing them can cost astronomical amounts of money.
Therefore
, they argue that preventing
diseases
 is more crucial. I only partially agree with
this
 view. While I admit that it is important to prevent
diseases
, in my opinion,
research
 into the cause of
diseases
 is our
first
 defence against them. A good reason to continue medical
research
 is that it is essential to save mankind. Many new
diseases
 have developed over the years. Without
research
 into their
behaviour
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 it is impossible to cure them.
Research
 is costly but it allows medical professionals to find cures and control the spread of illnesses in the future. After all,
the
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human life is more valuable than money.
Therefore
,
the
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governments must not hesitate to spend money on medical
research
 and cures. Another point to consider is that
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medical researches and treatments benefit the
economy
 indirectly. The medical
research
 sector employs thousands of people. The pharmaceutical companies that produce drugs
also
 employ lots of people and benefit the
economy
.
For example
, Switzerland’s
economy
 is supported by the medical industry. Over 60% of its incomes and revenues come from
this
 industry. There are
also
 countries that count on medical tourism. Patients come from different parts of the world to these countries in order to get treated and healed. These host nations make a fortune from
this
 type of tourism. In conclusion, while it is true that medical
research
 and treatments are expensive, they save lives and improve the
economy
.
Therefore
, I believe that they are vital for the existence and survival of mankind.
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