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Some people say that the internet will soon become the preferred method of delivery of the news and information, causing the newspapers and magazines to gradually disappear. Do you agree or disagree. Give your opinion and include examples from your knowledge and experience.

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With the advent of technology, people are now getting
news
 not only from printed bulletins but
also
 from online media.
Consequently
, there has been a growing body of opinion that in the near future,
newspapers
 and mags will not be published down to giving more priorities to the
internet
 by individuals for delivering
information
. Being a rational mind, I, too, assent to
this
 notion, for I am of the view that the
internet
 happens to be beneficial to minimize cost and maximize efficiency. Among the ratiocination, the one that stands out deals with the significance of the
internet
 as a way of saving money in case of transferring
information
,
news
 and so forth. To be more precise, the cost of advertisements or any type of
news
 on the online portals is much lower than that of printed media. In order to reduce cost,
hence
, people are now choosing the
internet
 for sharing
information
, resulting in a dramatic fall in the sales of
newspapers
 and magazines. To exemplify, in the USA, four newspaper mills are closed down in 2019 due to having
consequently
 lost in the
last
 five years and it is forecasted to be shut down another six magazine companies. Another rationale in reference to why the
internet
 will be the best way to deliver
information
 is necessarily synonymous with increasing productivity by saving valuable time.
In other words
, reporters are now able to depict their performance by presenting
information
 to the world within a
second
 through uploading
news
 on the
internet
, whereupon they do not have to waste their precious time to put out
news
 in
newspapers
 or magazines. To cite an example, an empirical study by Cambridge University reveals that online newspaper reporters are twice active and efficient as that printed media’s reporters.
Therefore
, there is more chance that journalists will choose the
internet
 to provide
information
 in the future, causing the disappearance of
newspapers
 and magazines. In essence, to have an opportunity to save money and increase efficiency, the
internet
 will indubitably become the preferred delivery method, resulting in the disappearance of printed papers.
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