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Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while other think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays , teaching can be done in various ways because there is a lot of content which is available on the internet and due to
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 reason, some people believe that teaching
children
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 at home is one of the best
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 for a
child
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's development, meanwhile , others think that it is crucial for the
children
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 to go to
school
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. In my opinion, it is good to teach
children
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 at home but in some
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 it is necessary for the
child
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 to be at
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. The following essay will discuss both views and
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 will give a detail explanation of my opinion. In today's world , due to the availability of content on the internet, it is not important to send the
children
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 to schools, as well as , they get personal attention from their parents who are educated.
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, there are many free lectures which are available on different websites and due to
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 fact , they can refer to the concept in which they have a doubt.
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 , if a
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 belongs to an educated family,
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 he will get personal help from them but if he goes to
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 , there are many
children
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 in one class and teacher will not be able to focus on each and every
child
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.
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 , many people believe that
children
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 should go to because ,
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, studies , there are many things that have to be learned. To illustrate , if a
child
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 goes to
school
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 , the most important that he acquires is how to work in a team by participating in
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 activities
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 as sports.
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 , they are able to make more friends in
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 and
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 gain knowledge about maintaining the friendship. To conclude , in my opinion , it is good to gain
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 at home but in some scenarios
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 as teamwork ,friendship it is necessary to be at schools.

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