In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting University studies. Discuss the advantage and disadvantage for young people who decide to do this.

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advantage and disadvantage of young people who encourage to go to work or travel for a year after they finished
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school and starting university. Overall, there are several
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of work or travel for a year after
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from high school ,
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, teens will get some new experience and they will learn how to be alone and do everything by
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. On the other hands, there
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some disadvantage of
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, some teens might think that one year of work or travel is too long so they decided not to go. Starting with the advantage,
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • broadened horizons
  • valuable life experiences
  • personal growth and development
  • engaging with different cultures
  • overcoming challenges
  • acquiring new skills
  • maturity
  • self-awareness
  • work experience
  • employment prospects
  • academic momentum
  • re-adjust
  • study habits
  • academic performance
  • financial aspect
  • pursuing certain activities
  • financial strain
  • university tuition
  • living expenses
  • perceived delay
  • inadequacy
  • anxiety
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