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Some people believe that robots will play an important role in future societies, while others argue that robots might have negative effects on society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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A lot of millennial are of the notion that
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automation
 will rule the society in the coming years while others disagree with the aforementioned statement. I believe that
robots
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 the workplace,
however
 excessive
use
 of bots among the human population will have several side effects too. Analysing the statement, due to advancement in the technology
robots
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 the workplace. Various man works are being handled by the machines. Especially the tasks which
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do not
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 involve much logical and analytical thinking and are repetitive in nature. Engineers are working flat out on
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 of
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 will be replaced by the machines. It will increase
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productivity as
robots
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 breaks. Explaining
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 another school of thought belongs to the side effects that
robots
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human society.
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, the efficiency and productivity will increase
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it will decrease the number of workers working in the factories resulting in loss of jobs.
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, automaton works only on the basis of the
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 systems they would not be able to gauge the success rate of the work being done. People usually
use
 artificial intelligence to make their lives easier and excessive
use
 of the same will have detrimental effects
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 human health. In conclusion,
robots
 will ease the man work by performing tasks which are simple and recurring while, excessive
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 on the human body and
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 on the machine may
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 result in unemployment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Artificial intelligence (AI)
  • Automation
  • Cybernetics
  • Efficiency
  • Job displacement
  • Manual labor
  • Robotics
  • Sophisticated machinery
  • Technological advancements
  • Workplace safety
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