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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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People are divided in their opinion regarding whether teenage years are the happiest time for most individuals or adulthoods. According to some folks,
teenagers
 are happier than
adults
, while others have a totally opposing view.
This
 essay will explore both views and I will explain why I believe
adults
'
life
 brings more happiness than teenagehood'. On the one hand,
teenagers
 have no direct responsibilities for
life
 and are still under the custody of their parents or caregivers.
In other words
, they do not have to make
money
 or provide support for others. Needless to say that, responsibility cause stress and can cause
adults
 not to be able to experience happiness as much.
Besides
, a teen can enjoy their
life
 by spending time with friends, watching TV, playing video games and having food, shelter and support of their caretakers. In fact, they have all they need to be happy.
On the other hand
, youth age is a big transition between childhood and adulthood and
lots
 of hormonal changes happen in their bodies. These changes can bring
lots
 of emotions like depression, anxiety that can negatively impact the sense of joy. On top of that, they are not mature enough to know how to properly deal with those emotions which can lead to unhappiness.
Furthermore
, they still have
lots
 of unknown about their futures in terms of career and education. All of that can make them not be able to enjoy
freedom
 and happiness. In my perspective,
adults
 have happier lives than
teenagers
.
Adults
 have already their future mostly planned and are working, no one can tell them what to do. They have
freedom
 of using their
money
 to enjoy
life
. while
teenagers
 are still dependent on their parents' approval for everything and can not spend
money
 on whatever they decide.
Thus
,
teenagers
 still cannot have the
freedom
 of spending
money
 and enjoy
life
 as much as
adults
. To sum up, while some might argue with me and find teenagehood most joyful period of time because they have less responsibility and more
freedom
 to enjoy their lives. In my view, youth are under
lots
 of pressure due to the hormonal changes and
also
 not having the future planned yet.
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