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Sample 3.Animal species are becoming extinct due to human activities on land and in the sea. What are the reasons and solutions.

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The activities of humans as apex creatures severely affect
animals
.
Furthermore
, forestation and hunting are some of the reasons that lead to the extinction of
animals
.
This
 essay will discuss the aforementioned causes and the solutions,
such
 as encouraging tree planting and
also
 a ban on animal hunting by the government. Forestation has a great impact on the habitat of
animals
, especially birds. For example, in Nigeria due to the cutting down of trees, fewer birds are seen, as many of them migrate to
neigbouring
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neighbouring
 countries where they can find suitable abode.
In addition
, hunting is
also
 a causative factor
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 the decline of animal life in certain geographic areas. Research reports that
animals
such
 as elephants and whales in china are killed either for leisure
,
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 or for their parts which are sold at
exhorbitant
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exorbitant
 rates on the black market.
Consequently
,
such
 actions lead to the massive reduction in
number
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 of these
animals
. One way to mitigate the effect of man's activities on the immediate environment is through planting. Programs
such
 as " Save a tree, Save
earth
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 " which was carried out in Ghana some years back, where citizens were encouraged to plant trees in a bid to protect the decline of
bird
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 population.
This
 will help to increase settlements for them.
Furthermore
, strict laws and measures should be enacted to
disuade
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dissuade
 the killing of
animals
 either for sport or entertainment.
Moreover
, Japan is already experiencing a surge in
number
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 of whales present in the Yuan sea, which was not so in the years past. The actions of the government by
prohbiting
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prohibiting
 animal abuse and punishing erring people led to
this
. To sum up,
animals
 contribute to the ecosystem.
Hence
, they are relevant, if actions
such
 as destruction of trees and hunting are countered by the government and
indivduals
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individuals
 effectively there will be visible growth in
animal
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 population, in a not so distant time.
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