For centuries, important parts of education have remained such as reading, writing and maths. With the advent of computers, some people think that computer skill be made as a fourth skill to be added to the list. To what extent do you agree?

In
this
20th century, some academic subjects have been implemented as
a mandatory subjects
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in
education
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institutions which provide knowledge about counting, writing and reading. But most
of
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the
people
argue that IT
skills
are imperative in
this
modern era and should be added
in
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academic
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field. In my perspective, technical
skills
are necessary to obtain
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white-collar
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white
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collar job in prestigious
companies
as well as to associate ourselves with international
companies
. To commence with, many successful organizations require employees with
computer
skills
as
these business
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are associated with another company with the help of
computer
technology.
In other words
,
new
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generation is willing to obtain
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white-collar
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white
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collar job in
this
modern era, so they want to apply for some positions in these
companies
.
In addition
, some societies consider that
computer
skills
should be part of the curriculum so that
modern
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generation could accomplish their dreams by getting jobs in bigger
companies
.
For instance
, the world
education
organization conducted a survey that shows us the importance of technical
skills
in professional business.
Also
, it reveals about
prestigious
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professional who accomplished their dreams by completing
computer
programs.
Secondly
, globalization has impacted
on
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people
's
education
skills
.
People
want to connect to other nations thought work.
In other words
, it can be possible if they receive
computer
skills
during their
education
.
For instance
, a survey conducted by international professors that complex obstacles can be solved by using
computer
technology as employees give presentations on
computer
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system.
As a result
, employers can make their business successful by getting IT
skills
during their academic years. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that
computer
skills
should be mandatory in
education
institutes as these
skills
assist us to connect with the world as well as
people
get
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job through
this
subject.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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