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Tourism is causing environmental problems all around the world. What are the main causes of this? What are some solutions?

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Few topics have drawn as much scholarly attention as environmental problems caused by
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. In recent years, there has been a dramatic increase in
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 throughout the world which causes severe environmental problems. There are several reasons why
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 problem. Primarily, the most telling reason for the increase in
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 lies in the fact that aviation become so cheap and it is available to everyone. On one hand, with the
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 if the airports and other transport facilities, people can travel to different places in the world. On the other, Increase in the air traffic causes a spike in the emission of carbon gases which are the main reason for global warming.
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, tourists travel from other continents bring goods which are not fit into the local ecosystem. Travelling with certain goods like shoes with mud, and food traces can destroy the local ecosystem.
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,
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 to eco-sensitive places will destroy the inhabitance of a
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 species and
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 causes different kinds of pollution. Admittedly, it is true that
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 brings a lot of revenue to countries, but one can not ignore the deleterious effects associated with it. To reduce the environmental problems associated with
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, governments should take some strict actions.
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, by reducing the number of tourists entering
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the country, the government can reduce carbon emissions.
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, governments should ban
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plastic usage in the packing, so that they can control the damage to the environment.
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, travelling to the eco-sensitive places should be stopped which saves the local ecosystem and reduces pollution. In conclusion, from what has been discussed above, one can not only identify the threats to the environment by
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 but
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 understand how we can control the damage to the environment.
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