In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decided to do this.

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Adolescents in many
countries
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are promoted to work and travel for one
year
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after high
school
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graduation.
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trend is popular in western
countries
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nowaday
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nowadays
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. It is a tendency to believe that young
people
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who took a
gap
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year
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before
start
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their
university
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may have
wide
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perspective and know the exact point of their future
life
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.
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, some
people
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may think that
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aspect may waste the time rather than go straight
in to
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into
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university
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after finishing high
school
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. According to
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point of view, there are many western
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children's
children
childrens
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children
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wandering to other
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after they are graduated
in
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from
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high
school
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to work and travel. Some young
people
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believe that work and travel before enrolled
to
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on
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university
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will make them gain more experience
also
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know what they want to be in the future.
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, living
by
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on
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their own without asking
money
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for money
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from
parent
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a parent
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will make them realise how to deal with the money in their
life
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.
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point
lead
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the better monetizing management and experiences from working. Pinpointing at travelling to
others
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countries
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can open their perspective in different cultures as well. The advantages of
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gap
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a gap
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year
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are
actual
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seen that the
children
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who have more experience in
life
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may prompt to start their lives in
university
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better than others.
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, some
people
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believes
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believe
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that the
gap
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year
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after high
school
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is wasted.
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, Asians
children
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mostly straightforward from high
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to
university
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so they can finish degrees and start their own lives faster. They think that the experiences can receive after they have their certain jobs and money.
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is why some
people
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think that the disadvantages of having a
gap
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year
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may waste the time of monetizing and having a quality job. They might lose their chances to apply to a good position in
university
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because when the time
pass
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passes
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by, there are more intelligence juniors to challenge your position in the major faculties that you want to apply
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In conclusion,
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there
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are several
of
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apply
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benefits and drawbacks of
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gap
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a gap
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year
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in high
school
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children
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. I strongly agree that it would be better for
children
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to take a
year
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leave before
start
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starting
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the
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apply
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university
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to fulfil the
life
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experience and guide the future
life
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in the happiness way
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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