: It is a good idea for teenagers to have jobs while they are still students. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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In recent years the technology has become dramatically grown in order to cope up with the advancement and competition among graduates
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argue that
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when they are pursuing their main course at the
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.I completely agree with a fact due to the amazing
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skills it can provide.I will discuss more in detail in the subsequent paragraphs.
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,Research at the California
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states that
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are more independent towards
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makes opportunities to strengthen as well as broaden once wisdom.
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in polish teenagers communication,interpersonal skills and ability to face society.
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working
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can open adverse
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opportunities.
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can learn about
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and possible situations it can create.
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student at Anna
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who pursue Electrical Engineering got a
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at nearby BSNL Service.
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widens his knowledge about the field due to that he found an issue at the ongoing project
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he awarded for his findings and got a permanent
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as an Electrical Engineer.
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,working during
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has become a trend among youngsters.There are numerous reasons behind it.
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some
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work
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due to family background issues while others are doing it fun and making new friends.Some
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point out
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at the
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has lot more assignments and research to complete,doing
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with it can cause serious stress to
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due to that they may be lack concentration on
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.In ,addition there are chances to drop out of college if
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not related to their
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student
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is the
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one
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can enjoy and do great things.
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to ,say we can not force any
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to
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without interest. when comparing to the benefits of
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job
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with other
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who don't have
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can open adverse doors to
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due to that I strongly
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the fact it is amazing to have a
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when pursuing a degree at
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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