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Personal finance is a topic that should be taught to students in elementary school. Do you agree or disagree?

#finance #topic #students #school
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In
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 era, financial management has become
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 much important to humans that teaching
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 skill to primary
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 children is considered essential. I believe that adding
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 topic to
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 education is worthwhile because at early ages students have a better learning power, and
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 practice can become a habit in future.
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 essay would discuss the benefits of personal
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 as a
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 subject.
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, individuals are better at adapting and learning new things at younger ages. A child can be easily taught about the importance of
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, how to prioritize expenditure, how savings can work later on in life.
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, once they grow older and start handling
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 without any management skills they find it difficult to adapt and learn to budget.
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, at
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 age children usually start getting pocket
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,
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 they can apply their learnings about personal
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 to spend and save
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money
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.
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, the skills learnt in childhood are more likely to become a habit while growing up. The procedures taught and followed at young ages usually continue throughout life,
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 students practising
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 management at schools would always recall those teachings while making budgets.
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, I find some of my cousins were better than me, at managing their
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 while growing up and even now, because their schools had lessons about
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 , which I did not get a chance to attend, so they can easily practice it unlike me. In conclusion, learning about
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 is essential for everyone, so the earlier the better, as it is easier to learn in
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 days as well as it can become a part of a day to day life.
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