Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.

Contemporary word is a consumer society which is full of goods and prepositions. Conspicuous consumption penetrates into all spheres of our life
therefore
people constantly faced a problem of multiple choice.
This
situation is supposed to be an obstacle in achieving
calm
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and easy life and some reasons make me think in
such
way
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. The
first
reason concerning the disadvantage of choices is that you become distracted and mixed-up.
For instance
, attending a moll for some people has become a procedure that makes them mad and crazy. Having made various purchases in an enormous department store you suffer a terrible headache which was caused by endless advertisements, light and obsessive music. Thinking over the
next
point I’d like to admit that a crucial number of choice leads to children disobedient and self-indulgence. Particularly every child obtains what he or she wants as parents can’t figure out how to say “no”.
Consequently
, from their
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they can’t put their desires into a certain frame which could get adverse effects in maturity. Some people argue that large scale manufacturing
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a reasonable competition among companies
therefore
the
last
ones are interested in producing items of good quality. So, for
everybody
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it could be a beneficial situation but
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this
strategy has failed.
As a
result
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we have had a widespread production which is obsessed with quantity but not quality. To sum up,
variety
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of choices is supposed to lead to the chaotic in breeding our kids, in our routines and even in our minds. It seems to me that it would be better to have
less
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choices but
desirable
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a desirable
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quality.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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