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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays,it is so indispensable to acquire a foreign
language
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 in order to have a better chance at
further
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 study or looking for a job in future.In
this
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 modern age,people who are bilingual are rated better than those who only speak one
language
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,that's why
children
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 in
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 generation are beginning to learn a foreign
language
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 at primary
school
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 rather than secondary
school
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.
To begin
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 with,English
for instance
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 has been a common
language
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 in our life and it is almost displayed around the world.Even though it is still not the most popular
language
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 in the world but it represents an international
language
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 to be learned the most.Meanwhile,it is better for
children
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 to learn at primary
school
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 because they are still in a development stage
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 their adaption's abilities can acquire the knowledge very quickly.
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,the lesson's programs at primary
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 are not as stressful as a secondary
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 so
students
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 will not worry about other subjects performance while pushing
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 in their foreign
language
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 subject.
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,
students
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 from a young age are more obedient than teenagers that's why they are more willing to listen to teachers and parents,
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 can benefits the road of their studies a lot.
On the other hand
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,
students
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 at secondary
school
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 are teenagers and they are
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 in their puberty period
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 their behaviour can be changed.Even though they are smarter to
learn
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 compare to primary
students
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,they may get worried about having a plunge in other subjects while they are learning a new
language
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.Even though it sounds tough,it does not mean they cannot accomplish the learning progress
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 they may need to have an extra class in a foreign
language
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 in order to compete with those already have a cornerstone in English from their primary
school
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,
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 problem will make a shortage of their free time and even put pressure on them. In conclusion,it is better for
children
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 to gain another
language
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 from primary
school
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 rather than a secondary
school
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 because
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 early process will create a basis of knowledge for them
thus
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children
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 will able to adapt these abilities better in future.
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