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Writing Samples
Band 6.5

You have heard that a developer plans to build a shopping center near your home. Write a letter to the council. In your letter • say how you heard about the plan • explain how you feel about it • ask for more information about it You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

Dear Sir, I am Cheng Yat Hin, a resident who cares about the issue of
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 shopping mall erection
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 my home. A big announcement on the community bulletin board caught my eyeballs. It was about the new erection of a shopping centre which made me really excited since
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 community has been a barren place without any shopping malls. So, I want to know more information about the project.
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 with, I want to know the completion date of the shopping mall construction. Since the construction site might influence my daily life like traffic arrangements.
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, I would like to know if there are any protection measures around the construction site for our privileges.
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, a sound barrier should be utilised well because I do not want to be disturbed by sound nuisance.
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 but not least, I am curious about the genres of shops that would be located within the new shopping mall. Thank you for your kind attention, I am looking forward to your reply. Yours Sincerely, Cheng Yat Hin

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coherence and cohesion
Try to separate your feelings from your questions in different paragraphs for better structure.
task achievement
Use more polite language to ask for information, as it reflects a suitable tone.
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The letter has a clear greeting and closing, showing good etiquette.
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It explains how and why you feel about the shopping mall, which shows personal engagement.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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