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People do not often interact with their neighbours and this can be harmful for building communities. What are the possible causes and how can this be solved? ⠀

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People
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 may not communicate with their
neighbours
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 because they want to communicate selectively, with
people
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 they like, but
neighbours
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 nowadays are often random
people
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 in an apartment building or a new residential area. It's hard to build a community out of random
people
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.
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 means that there is a need to look for something in common that could connect
people
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, wherever they live. The
first
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 cause of the problem may be that
people
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 buy housing, based on the availability of the necessary money to buy or the proximity of housing to transport. But they are in no way guided by the
people
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 who live there, they do not know anything about them.
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people
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 from different cities and regions find themselves in a new apartment building, they have never met each other before, it is difficult for them to find a common language. The
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 reason might be that
people
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 are moving to a new location because it is conveniently located to get to work,
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. And
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 has nothing to do with the question of who lives in the vicinity,
neighbours
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 and their interests are not even considered.
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people
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 come to Moscow to work, they don't care who lives nearby. The solution to the problem might be that
people
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 could have
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 possibility to live where they want and work remotely.
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 they would be in the mood to go out on their street and communicate with their
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. In
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 a case, they will not view the accommodation as simply a place to sleep. In conclusion, building a human community requires
people
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 to put human values and interests
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. If
people
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 are united by common values and are able to live close to each other and communicate more often, they can build a real community to live in.
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