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Some people think that the government is responsible for looking after the elderly. Others believe that it should be family members. Who do you think should take responsibility?

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It is becoming accepted by some
people
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 that old
people
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 ought to be taken
care
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 of by the
government
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, while others are of opinion that family
members
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 need to
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 for their old
parents
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 in today's complex society. Personally, I totally agree that both the
government
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 and family
members
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 should take responsibility for the elderly for some reasons. As time goes on, human beings are due to become old.
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, we sometimes need someone else to be looked after in terms of physical activity or financial situation. As for who should be responsible for older
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, in my view, the authorities along with families could possibly do a favour for the elderly.
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, if only the
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 is forced to come to a decision to grand social aid for the elderly population, in
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 case, it will meet their needs for money. And they will be on the verge of being a lack of
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.
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, the
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 is not sufficient for the elderly to survive.
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, one of the parental duties in life is to bring up their offspring. From my perspective,
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 children must have a commitment in front of their
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.
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, sons and daughters are responsible for their elderly
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 because they need their children as much as kids need their
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 when they are in childhood. Having said that, the
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 has to help them as well.
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, in case only family
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 are compelled to look after their old
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 and if they are living under the poverty line, in
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 regard, the family will not be able to meet their necessities.
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 of
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, the old
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 may be forced to live in nursing houses, which, I do not think, they deserve living. In conclusion, despite some
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 claim that the
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 have lots of things to do related to
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 issue, I am not inclined to believe that it is possible without the helping of family
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. It is because, the elderly not only need financial aid, but
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 sweet
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 by their children.
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