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The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern life style. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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There has been a dramatic change in the lifestyle of
people
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 over the years and they have become busier. The availability of readymade
food
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 has made it easy to maintain
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 modern lifestyle. While there are some clear benefits to
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 situation, I personally believe that the drawbacks are more significant. The main advantage of
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convenience
food
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 is that it saves the time which is spent
in
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 cooking
food
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.
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,
people
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 can utilize
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 time for other purposes
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 as relaxing and doing other recreational activities.
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, the productivity of work has increased.
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, there are many
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 stalls available at the workplace;
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 one finds it convenient to have lunch with so many options to choose
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, one does not have to wake up early to cook
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.
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, there are many disadvantages associated with readymade
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, it may be unhealthy and unhygienic.
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, it does not provide complete nutrition and contains preservatives
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 are harmful if consumed in excess quantity.
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, studies have linked the rise in cancer cases to the high content of preservatives in the packed
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, the standards of hygiene are not maintained in many
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 stalls.
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 can lead to the spreading of diseases
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 as typhoid and cholera and reduce the productivity of
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. To conclude,
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 is the main advantage of the availability of convenience
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;
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, in my opinion, the disadvantages of regular consumption of readymade
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 outweigh the advantages. Given
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, it is recommended that
people
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 should give up their dependence on packaged
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 and consume more homemade
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.
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