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Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world some people think that this cannot be changed by other believe action can be taken to bring about a change

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Activities of human have had a bad effect on progress as well as phone around the world a handful of
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 believe that
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 issue cannot be changed.
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, the rest of the folk says that with the aid of strict
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 hurdle can be taken to bring about a change. At the onset, in the materialistic Era individual have had to struggle in their life due to
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 to study so close have no much time to give to the
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 because people have no idea what is the importance of plants and animal in their life.
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,
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 know very well deforestation is
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main cause which period bad background for as well as Pune
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 do not want to be aware of the atmosphere.
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, as per the survey of the Indian ,government most of the
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 pollute the
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 and they do not want to change their lifestyle so
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 why these type of activity create a negative impact on both animal and plants.
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, there are ample of the solution to change
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 problem but of all local administration should organise awareness camp of the citizen by which
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 will be aware of
environment
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, the government should make a strict
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 for those who do deforestation.To site and example Western Nations type of problem of flora and fauna Vikas decision of that reason for the role which is made by authorities To conclude,
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 have to hear about
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 and section should photo the
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 which has been made by the government by following these
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 animal and plant will be safe
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