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Countries should produce the food that their population eats, and import as little as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons, examples to your answer.

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In today's era,
food
 scarcity is one of the major concern. Nations shall reckon to pay attention to public demand for
food
 production and limit their imports. It is,
therefore
, imperative that every state drafts its own plans for self-sufficiency in crop raising. I am in complete agreement with
this
 opinion. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall expound my thoughts in detail.
Firstly
, the dearth of edibles results in
inflammation
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 of foodstuffs.
For example
, natural calamities when farms are destroyed
it
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apply
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results in an increased rate of that product and indirectly impacts the pocket of a resident. As per the survey by "The
Times
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,Times
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" most of the events the
food
 prizes have been increased due to damage caused to the field during heavy rainfall.
Secondly
, in times of war-like
situations
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 international trade will be completely banned. So countries which depend solely on imports for feeding their population will suffer badly.
For instance
, during the pandemic
situation
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 the trade across national borders was stopped due to which all home countries had to rely on inhouse
food
 generation for feeding the population. Improving the agricultural sector impacts positively on the country's economy. It creates jobs opportunities for the unemployed and helps in eradicating poverty. If crops are produced in surplus, it increases exports.
Food
 security
also
 increases the brand image of the country in the international arena owing to increased stability. If we can produce nutritious
food
 in a self-sustained manner, we will be building a healthy community.
This
 will help us to become a superpower in the competitive world market. To put it in a nutshell,
food
 security is indeed a necessity at
this
 hour. It is a sign of an improved economy and
also
 a solution for many chronic problems within a country.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-sufficiency
  • trade dependency
  • food security
  • sustainable agriculture
  • local economies
  • carbon footprint
  • supply chain
  • food miles
  • agricultural sector
  • domestic production
  • import substitution
  • food sovereignty
  • global supply chains
  • trade imbalances
  • food standards
  • economic resilience
  • biodiversity
  • cultural heritage
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