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Space travel has been possible for some time and some people believe that space tourism could be developed in the future . Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Lack of interest of
children
 in current affairs has been fairly common in most countries around the world. Only
few
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youth
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 are becoming up-to-date with the latest headlines in the newspapers or on TV. I believe
this
 in connection with the short attention span of the young nowadays. A key reason why
children
 lose interest in reading or watching
news
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 can be attributed to their attention span. Several studies suggest that with the emergence of technologies in
the
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recent years, wherein everything we intend to know is easily accessible, the attention
time
 of
children
 has decreased dramatically especially for activities that
requires
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 limited action and thinking. Since reading newspapers requires a certain amount of
time
, young people will surely become interrupted while reading long articles.
Similarly
, when watching
news
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 on TV, it is broadcasted in a considerable
time
 which might keep them unoccupied to the activity.
Youth
's interest,
however
, is not difficult to capture. They are easily mesmerized with
enaging
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engaging
 activities or attractive concepts. In fact, most newspapers already include a section of crossword puzzles that they can work with while reading.
Addtionally
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Additionally
, if we want to engage more the
youth
 in becoming aware of the news, perhaps, we can make use of technology in order to penetrate their interests with the subject. Nowadays, a lot of articles are found online, even
in
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 most social media sites. Some channels are
also
 broadcasted live or uploaded as videos so they can access
it
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them
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 whenever they want. In these ways, we are able to influence the
youth
 through the platforms that they are more
familar
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familiar
 with. In conclusion, it is quite a challenge in the present
time
 on how
youth
 can be more engaged with the recent happenings in the world.
Although
 the development of technologies has been identified to be the reason
of
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why
attentiveness
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 of
children
 has
shorten
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 over
time
, it can
also
 be maximized as a platform to engage more the
youth
 about current headlines.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Advancement in technology
  • Scientific knowledge
  • Economic benefits
  • Environmental impact
  • Inequality
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