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Band 6.5

Global warming is increasing day by day. What are the causes of global warming and what can be done to eradicate this global problem?

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Global warming is something that we can no longer ignore the increase in
earth
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 temperature leads to melting north pole ice, which raises sea level all over the globe.
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 essay will discuss the causes of
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 a problem and what are possible solutions. Carbon emission is the main reason for the greenhouse gas effect.
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 is caused by the accumulation of carbon in the
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 as it prevents sunlight and heat to escape from the
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 atmosphere again, creating a reflection layer that adds up the temperature with time. One of the main contributors to polluting the
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 is factories and cars. Both burn fossil fuel to generate
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 which fills the
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 with carbon monoxide
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 of the process. The demand for
energy
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 is increasing but the dependency on coal, petroleum and natural gas is not going anywhere. In the USA they lately ramped up the extraction of petrol from their own land because of the
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 demand.
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 needs won't just vanish, ,
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instead
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 we need to have short term goals and long term plan to depend more on green sources of
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.
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instance
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 as of
today
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 we need to increase the awareness of the damage we caused to the
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 until today, and talk about the small steps we can talk to help fix the problem. As for now and the future harvesting the power of the sun using solar panels, and the use of
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 turbines to generate electricity will help to slow down the degradation of our
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. The electrification of cars will help in cleaning the
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 and give the
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 a chance to clean itself. In conclusion, it is never too late. Acting now will save our big home from being destroyed and becoming unlivable. We just need to take action right now.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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  • multilingual
  • fluency
  • communicate
  • cognitive skills
  • cultural awareness
  • opportunities
  • globalized world
  • job market
  • interact
  • linguistic abilities
  • cultural exchange
  • language proficiency
  • language barrier
  • foreign travel
  • personal growth
  • academic achievement
  • self-confidence
  • enhance
  • cross-cultural communication
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