In some parts of the world it is becoming popular to research the history of one's own family. Why might people want to do this? IS it a positive or negative development?
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make them aware of what disease they are more at risk.
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a trend because it detects possible diseases that a person can develop in the future. Change the verb form
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test is usually done by submitting a DNA sample, which will be studied in a lab. Once the result is out, the origin, genetics, and possible diseases will be indicated. Linking Words
For instance
, a Swedish celebrity underwent the exam and he found out that he was at risk of cardiac arrest.
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individuals not knowing where their family came from or what their identity truly Change preposition
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For example
, in the 17th century, many Africans were transported to the USA to become slaves. Linking Words
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in several states and most of them have no idea of their origin.
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The essay only partially addresses the prompt and lacks a clear position on whether the trend is positive or negative. The ideas are not fully developed and there is a lack of relevant examples to support the points made.