In some parts of the world it is becoming popular to research the history of one's own family. Why might people want to do this? IS it a positive or negative development?

Tracing one's family origin and history is becoming a trend in various parts
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the world. In my opinion, people do
this
in order to learn more about where they came from so that they will have an insight
of
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their past. I think
this
is a good development because it will make individuals appreciate their past and it will
also
make them aware of what disease they are more at risk. Everyone has a unique genetic composition;
however
, in a
family
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there is a common predisposition to a disease. Some people like to invest money in the detection of their
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hereditary
conditions
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so that they can prevent it.
That is
why DNA checking has
became
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a trend because it detects possible diseases that a person can develop in the future.
This
test is usually done by submitting a DNA sample, which will be studied in a lab. Once the result is out, the origin, genetics, and possible diseases will be indicated.
For instance
, a Swedish celebrity underwent the exam and he found out that he was at risk of cardiac arrest.
Additionally
, in the past few centuries, in human
history
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there
has
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been
numberous
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numerous
events that
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transipired
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transpired
. Families were separated by wars, natural disasters, slavery, and job
oppurtunities
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opportunities
. There
were
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no communication between family
mebers
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members
, and it resulted
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individuals not knowing where their family came from or what their identity truly
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.
For example
, in the 17th century, many Africans were transported to the USA to become slaves.
This
massive human exploitation has
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to a huge population of black
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in several states and most of them have no idea of their origin.
To conclude
, tracing one's
root
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is important because it gives people
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glimps
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the health conditions that they are more at risk
at
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.
Moreover
, It is
also
important since it gives a person a sense of identity.
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The introduction lacks a clear rephrasing of the prompt and a thesis statement. The conclusion is not strong and does not summarize the main points effectively. The essay lacks a clear progression of ideas and linking devices.
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The essay only partially addresses the prompt and lacks a clear position on whether the trend is positive or negative. The ideas are not fully developed and there is a lack of relevant examples to support the points made.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Genealogy
  • Heritage
  • Ancestry
  • Lineage
  • Descendants
  • Forebears
  • Pedigree
  • Dynasty
  • Progenitors
  • Ethnicity
  • Genetic predisposition
  • Familial ties
  • Archival records
  • Hereditary
  • Kinship
  • Self-identity
  • Patriarchy/Matriarchy
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