Some people consider price as the most important thing to consider when buying a product such as a cell phone and services like medical treatment. Do you agree or disagree?

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Public
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often
choose
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things to buy considering the price.
For instance
, smartphones or doctor visit. People think, that if the price is higher, the quality would be better. From my point of view, they are right. I agree that cost is an essential thing to consider with. It can be explained by the connection between producing
high quality
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product or service and it’s
charge
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a charge
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. I guess,
one
of the most popular examples is the iPhone because it is known as
one
of the most expensive phones.
For instance
, it has been mentioned in the Economist magazine, that it’s sum is 15% higher than other smartphones’ cost.
This
shows, that people understand, that a lot of staff is working to produce
this
gadget.
Moreover
, the latest high technologies are used to do it more productive and fashionable. All
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things make
the
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value. You can buy a cheaper cell phone, but it can
broke
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in three months and make you
to
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buy
an
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another
one
.
Therefore
, why not to get more expensive but do
this
once? Another common example is medical treatment and it’s value. The logic is the same.
Doctor
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The doctor
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needs a lot of time and money to get a good education. His qualification depends on how he studied
in
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the university and how long he has been
practicing
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. So, you must pay more for
more
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the more
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qualified person and
the
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guaranty that your health is not in danger. To summarize, price consists of time, technologies and education. In my humble opinion, it is better to get
more
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qualitative product than risk and buy a cheaper
one
.
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