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Most people these days prefer getting news online to reading newspaper or watching TV. Do you think it is a positive development?

#people #news #newspaper #tv #development
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people
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 are changing their interest
of
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 reading
news
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 through electronic sources rather than reading
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newspaper
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a newspaper
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 .With the advent of
technology
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news
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 from all over the world is made available online which gives
people
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 to go through
news
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 coming from different corners of the world
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newspapers
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 are still in existence as some
people
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 prefer the traditional way of reading
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. In my
opinion
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 electronic sources of
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 will gradually replace that of the
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 in
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future
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 but
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 will not disappear completely. The argument in favour of
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 is that the older generation still likes to read
news
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 through papers as it has become an important part of their daily routine they wake up every morning and enjoy reading
newspapers
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 with a cup of coffee.
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, some
people
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 are still away from being a fan of
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, so they do not want to change the old ways of receiving information as they find themselves comfortable in following the same old habits. That said,
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newspaper
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the newspaper
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 will still be in existence in
coming
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 future.
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, as
the
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technology
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 has provided us with
the
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numerous ways to stay updated the younger generation find it at
ease
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the ease
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 of getting information with a click of
button
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a button
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 on their phones or laptops.
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,
instead
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 of spending money on
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the newspaper
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newspaper
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 they prefer reading
news
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 online whenever and wherever they want.
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,
technology
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 is much easier to use and it is available 24 hours.
Hence
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popularity
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the popularity
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 of online media
news
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 has increased gradually To summarise it is fair enough to say that electronic sources
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 dominated
newspapers
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, but it cannot completely make them disappear as some
people
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 still demands them rather than reading
news
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 online.
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