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Every household should have a government-imposed limit on the amount of rubbish it can throw away. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

#household #limit #amount #rubbish
Who should be responsible for our people
.
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Peoples
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 situation
gets
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 worse in
the
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many countries. The first question must be what they
want’s
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 and what they need
?
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 Especially their necessity is more benefit more respect more quiet
life
. If they have been working for a long time in
the
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any company or in the Public Sector and when they get old
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 means during their
retire’s
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time
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 company or Government must be responsible for their welfare, it is just my opinion. They should take care of them.
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 to the company or Government. If they have good money they can look after themselves. We can do something to make easier their
life
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 an organization or a voluntary association,
unions
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. The
families
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 or Relative’s responsibility depends on their wealthy situations. If they could do they should do anything.
Government’s
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 or their former place could supply them with
life
 insurance and a good Social Security Policy. The Social community centre or old age
pensioner
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 like in Britain are very useful for them. For all of
them
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life
 is hard and gets harder, in
the
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their old
ages
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. They expect more attention and
good
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life
. The old people, if don’t want
lost
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 them. We should do anything that
what
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we
able
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 to do
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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