Parents should encourage children to spend less time studying and more time doing physical activities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is believed that
parents
should advice
their kids to do Replace the word
advise
sport
activities Change the noun form
sports
instead
of spending more time
studying. In my opinion, i
somewhat agree with Change the capitalization
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this
, however
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,however
i
believe that both education and sport are important.
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First
of all, these days, the parents
may realize that their children
spend some of their time
at home doing various works including studying. So, they encourage them to spend more time
doing exercises. One of the main reasons can be that nowadays children
can gain weight,less communication with people, or having a
weak health. Remove the article
apply
This
means that they could manage their time
and do physical activities. Another reason can be that children
can have a variety of works during that day beside
studying. Verify preposition usage
besides
For instance
, a
latest research showed that Change the article
the
daily
routine may not develop Correct article usage
a daily
the
person's personality.
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Secondly
, it is also
possible to make the opposing case that studying is the basic of the children
too, and parents
have to be aware of this
also
. One of the major reasons can be that the
education these days is necessary for Correct article usage
apply
children
and for their future. The second
point is that children
might addict sports
and become careless about studying. A particularly good example here is that some recent statistics showed that most Change preposition
to sports
of
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football
players were having low marks in high school because of spending more Add an article
the football
time
playing soccer during their childhood.
To sum up, while some people believe that parents
should promote their children
to exercise, i
believe that both education and sports are important.Change the capitalization
I
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