In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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industry
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been increasing so rapidly, so we can travel anywhere
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even though
we don't have our own car or we don't drive.
Trains
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visit a city that placed really far from our home town easily. We can take not only the
train
but
also
the buses and the subways. I'm going to
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discuss
that what is more important to us either constructing
new
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railway or improving existing public
transport
. Some
people
think
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spend large amounts of money on making
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railway for
fast
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the fast
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train
is important. These days, we have many options to choose
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we visit
the
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city that far from our hometown.
Train
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is one of
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the popular
thepopular
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the thepopular
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vehicles to be chosen. Of
course
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we can take a plane, but it is expensive
then
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train
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and the price is not fixed.
Therefore
, constructing as much railway as possible makes
people
more
convinient
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convenient
to travel and
also
it helps saving money.
Although
making fast
trains
is important, some
people
thing improving existing public
transport
is more worth
that
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than
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the fast
trains
.
The fast
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trains
are only for the
people
who want to travel far away, but
majority
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the majority
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of
people
use public transportation in their daily life,
such
as a bus, a
train
, and the subway.
Thus
,
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the lack
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of public
transport
can cause
inconvinience
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inconvenience
. In my opinion, many options of public
transport
is
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are
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more important than
the
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fast
trains
. Because,
the
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fast
trains
might be cheaper than
the
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aircraft, but increasing speed means it needs high technology.
Therefore
the price of the
trains
should be increased and if it happens, not the many citizens are able to use it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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