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As countries develop, people tend to buy more and more cars. Do you think the advantages for the individual outweigh the disadvantages for the environment?

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Over the years with technological and economical development, it has become a common tendency for
people
 to buy more
cars
. It has both advantages and
disadvantages
, the locomotion with help of
cars
 has become far more convenient and
time saving
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.
Consequently
,
increased
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the increased
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 number of
cars
 has resulted in
exploitation
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the exploitation
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 of natural fuels and contributed to environmental pollution. In my
opinion
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 the
disadvantages
 caused by buying more
cars
 is way beyond the advantages it brings to the buyers.
Increase
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 in
economy
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the economy
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 has uplifted the financial situation of individuals thereby making them able
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to fulfill
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fulfill
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 their needs. In order to conveniently commute to different locations, which could be travelling to
office
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the office
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 and back home, every individual wish to own a car.
This
 is
quite
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thoughtful
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 reason being travelling by local transport is nowadays very hectic and
time consuming
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.
For example
, travelling by local buses and trains can be very tiring because they are overcrowded and there is hardly any place to sit. Most of the times the buses are delayed and
people
 often reach late at their destination.
Cars
 have raised the living standard of
people
 by providing them comfort and ease to travel as per their needs.
On the other hand
, increased purchase and usage of
cars
 is contributing to the degradation of our
environment
. As we know more
cars
 imply more usage of natural flues, which is already in limited quantity, resulting in more environmental pollution. Studies show that the countries
such
 as Germany, where public transport is the major mode of locomotion, has less air pollution in comparison to countries
such
 as India, where individual
cars
 are the main means of transportation.
Therefore
, it is crucial to understand that the damage done to the
environment
 is not repairable
This
 essay argued the advantage and
disadvantages
 of buying more cards. I strongly believe that the
disadvantages
 of having more
cars
 for
environment
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 outweigh its advantages for
people
. We are borrowing the
environment
 and its natural fuels from our future generations and must use it wisely.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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