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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy same products anywhere in the world Is this positive development or negative?

#countries #people #products #world #development
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Some
people
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 harbour a belief that
people
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 in different countries are becoming more similar due to the
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 widely spread and purchase in any part of the
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 and
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 have many merits, while others hold the reverse viewpoint. From my perspective, it is a controversial issue
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 deserves an in-depth discussion.
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 with, one of the main argument in its rejection is that purchasing the same items leads to harder identification. Considering wearing the same clothes and take one kind of hat,
people
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 not only lose their personal style but may hard to recognize them with looking no different.
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,
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 are distributed all over the
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 might make the price go down.
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, some certain
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 are sold
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 stores and
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 sold everywhere, their prices certainly decrease and to some extents would affect the global economy.
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,
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 occasionally realize the fact that the
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 widely spread can eliminate discrimination.
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 of social status, the poor
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 can buy the same type of
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 or one band as the rich publics that may make them feel equal.
Besides
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 the aforementioned, nowadays, through the social media share the information about various useful
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,
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 as
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 sometimes watch YouTubers to introduce the commodities which are useful and the price are reasonable,
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 many
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 would tend to buy the same
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 or interests
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 share the review with each other so as to get
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 to make
friend
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a friend
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 and the
world
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 will be similar in the end. In conclusion, despite the fact that the
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 sold around the
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 have
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a blessing
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 and curse in some aspects;
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, I personally believe that the advantages are more beneficial than the disadvantages.
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  • Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
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