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Some people think that a person can be known from his clothes. Do you agree or disagree.

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Nowadays the fashion industry is experiencing a boom because of the never-ending demand of
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 for new
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. All around the world Clothing, which consumes a major part of ones earning, is considered of topmost priority because they believe
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 express who a person is. I strongly disagree with
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 belief that
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 identify a person.
To begin
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 with, presentability has always been popular among humans for ages because it reflects the
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 impression of
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, even before they start speaking. The reason being, well-dressed
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 are always appealing even though they might not be as they seem.
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, In a gathering or a
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 the most well-dressed person catches our attention.
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, one's attire plays a vital role in developing an opinion about them.
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, It is extremely unfair to judge
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 based on their appearance. The dressing can not be a strong basis to build up an opinion about
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. It would be more reasonable to judge
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 on basis of their knowledge.
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,
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 have different priorities. Studies indicate that a majority of rich
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 like Ratan Tata prefers wearing simple
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. Rather than spending money on trying to look smart. It is far more intelligent to actually be smart. In conclusion, It is thoughtful to look good and wear good
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.
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, it is extremely important to not judge
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 based on their appearance. In my opinion,
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 often are not the same as they appear.
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, what is inside matters more than what appears on the outside.
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