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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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 of people nowadays have vegetarian nutrition ,
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 many experts reported, that eating at least 100 grams of
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 is something normal ,
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 consuming more fruits and
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 leads to a healthy life. There a
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 of debates about
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 topic. In my opinion, a vegetarian diet is definitely a good thing for our body as having a balanced meal which contains both
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 and
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 is the key factor for our health. A
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 of people nowadays have vegetarian nutrition ,
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however
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 many experts reported, that eating at least 100 grams of
meat
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 is something normal ,
on the other hand
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 consuming more fruits and
vegetables
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 leads to a healthy life. There are a
lot
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 of debates about
this
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 topic. In my opinion, a vegetarian diet is definitely a good thing for our body as having a balanced meal which contains both
vegetables
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 and
meat
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, is the key factor for our health. In
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 I will present my point of view on
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 matter.
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, I would like to say a few words in favour of eating
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. There are a
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 of studies based on the importance of following a diet to have a healthy life, even those with
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. It contains many useful elements
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proteins
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, which are highly beneficial for our health. It is scientifically proven that proteins not only generate energy but
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 improve our immune system. We can find a way to combine
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 with
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 and fruit in order to get a healthy and tasty meal. Especially lean
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 is considered to be an excellent protein source. It is important to include in our daily diets the necessary amount of protein, fat and carbohydrates. Thanks to them, we feel better, and it helps to build muscles and bones. Of course, there are some people who do not think the same. As one of the reasons could be the fact that some vegetarians simply feel sorry about the animals.
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 of advantages
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 being a vegetarian.
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,
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 and other non-vegetarian products contain a
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 of calories and elements which within some period of time can cause incurable diseases,
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 as cancer and cardiovascular problems. In conclusion, I do not think that
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 from our ratio because we need it for
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healthy nutrition.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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