Children should be allowed to choose subjects to learn at school. Do you agree with this statement?

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There is no consensus in society
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should choose
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for
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. But the majority of the pedagogues and scientists think that should be
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. I agree with
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statement. Because in my opinion it is very important to know what
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children
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would like to study and they must be allowed to choose
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to attend. So I will try to prove
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that with examples of Finland
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education and professor Jan Danilov's research. The reason why
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should be allowed to choose
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lessons is that they can take a vector of their professional and intellectual development.
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in Finland take
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for
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and statistically they are more successful than
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from other countries. In the same
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Finland education system is one of the best education
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in the world and
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the reason why Finnish people often are professionals in their job. So allow
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to choose
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subjects
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is a good idea because
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they become good specialists. The
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example
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of why
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pupils
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should choose
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for themselves is
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Jan Danilov's research from Poland National University. In 1998
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proved that
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children
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who studying
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chosen by themselves are better
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70% than
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who learning a
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standard
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programm
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programme
program
. So
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why enabling
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to choose lessons to learn at
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is very important. In
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I agree with
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statement and in my
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it is necessary to allow
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to choose
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to attend.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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