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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #language
It is commonly stated that living where a foreign
language
are
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 spoken have some challenges for
people
 moving to
this
 foreign
country
 ,
such
 as practical and social
problems
 .I completely agree with
given
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 statement and I intend to support my views with my arguments. There is no doubt that the best way of communication with
people
 is
language
.
That is
 to say,
people
 can transfer their opinions to
others
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people
 with
language
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 that they speak. As not being able to speak the native
language
 where is migrated can affect their ability socialize, if
language
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the language
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 of
country
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the country
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 is not known ,
people
 may
came
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 across the problem of making new friends.
Therefore
,
this
 situation may cause
that
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people
 to feel alone.
On the other hand
, it is
well-know
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 fact that
culture
 and
language
 are interrelated. put simply,
language
 and
culture
 are inextricably linked, not knowing
language
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a language
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 means having no idea about
culture
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the culture
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 of
country
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, which causes some social
problems
.
People
 who have to live in a
country
 where their mother
language
 is not spoken should adapt to the
culture
 of
country
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the country
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 because
people
 can be more easily accepted by locals when they adapt to a
culture
, which can enhance
people
’s
self-confidences
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 and can prevent social
problems
Finally
 ,but not less important, there may be a communication problem with native
people
 in daily life ,if
people
 do not speak the local
language
 .When
people
 go
to
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somewhere ,
such
 as
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hospital, restaurant or shopping, they may not be able to explain what they want or their requires as do not speak
the
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 foreign
language
 .Take someone who
have
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 to go to the hospital in
foreign
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a foreign
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country
 as an example; as
this
 person may not express her illness or understand
doctor’s
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 expression , the wrong therapy can be started for
this
 patient , which may cause irreversible consequences. To summarize in the light of the information given above, I can confidently say that speaking
language
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 of
country
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the country
a country
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 is necessary and living without having the local
language
 causes social and practical
problems
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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