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In some countries, many people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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In most developed countries
people
 prefer staying independently. Over the past few years
this
 trend of living separately, away from families, has gained momentum.
This
 essay will discuss both pros and corns of
this
 recent advancement. I strongly believe that
this
 new way of living has a more negative impact than positive.
To begin
 with, many
people
 especially the youth prefer staying alone for the sake of their privacy.
Moreover
, there is no one to invade your personal space while your belongings remain untouched. The reason being, living independently gives us authority over the way we want to live.
For example
, when living independently one must not worry about cleaning while staying with family obligates you to keep the house clean as other members do.
Therefore
, studio apartments are in increased demand in most developed countries.
Conversely
, Living apart from families has made humans less emotionally attached to their homes. Over time the emotional bond is deterioration because
people
 are more concerned about their individual lives.
In addition
,
people
 nowadays visit their parents only once a year.
For instance
, a study in Germany states that
although
people
 are living in the same city despite they only visit their parents on Christmas.
Hence
, residing alone has driven
people
 apart from their loved ones. In conclusion, Living alone provides privacy and freedom to live the way we like but It has taken away emotions from our lives. In my opinion, living alone is driving us far from the love of our families and has a more negative impact on us.
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