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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is commonly believed by many
people
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 that living in a
country
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 where you can't speak your mother tongue could lead to severe social
problems
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 apart from practical
problems
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. I completely agree that
people
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 own some
problems
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 in relation to speaking a foreign
language
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.
To begin
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 with, there are many reasons why speaking a foreign
language
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 poses a problem for humans living in any
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.
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First
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 and foremost reason is that learning a foreign
language
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 brings its own
problems
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 because humans have to adapt to the
country
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 which they have never lived in before.
Secondly
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, they are supposed to learn fluently the
language
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 spoken there before going abroad. Take the
people
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 who would like to have a master’s degree abroad as an example; if the
people
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 knew how to express to their tutor the subject which they want to learn, they would impress easily to tutor with their knowledge and experience. Another point to consider is that humans might face
problems
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 in daily life.
In other words
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, to go shopping, make friends and find jobs could be difficult for
people
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 who go abroad without enough learning
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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.
Moreover
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, these
people
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 could be excluded from society by local
people
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.
Thus
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, socialization anxiety is a typical example of
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language
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 problem which can be faced by mankind who want to learn
native
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the native
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language
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 in another
country
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. In conclusion, I strongly believe that
people
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 are supposed to learn
to
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the native
language
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 of the
country
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 in which they have to live to avoid social and practical
problems
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 before they go abroad.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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