Rich countries often give financial aid to poor countries, but it does not solve poverty. So rich countries should give other types of help to poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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countries
offer financial support to developing
countries
,
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poverty has remained
as
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a crucial problem in many
countries
.
Therefore
, it is often argued by some that many other supports should be extended by rich nations to tackle
this
problem. I completely agree with
this
view and numerous approaches can be taken to effectively solve the problem.
Firstly
, one of the most effective solutions would be starting multinational companies in developing
countries
. It is
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well known
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fact that the unemployment rate is extensively higher in these poor
countries
. If rich nations can make
substantial
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amount of jobs the poor people definitely obtain several benefits.
For instance
, in Sri Lanka, a lot of textiles companies are recently started
by
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China,
hence
, career opportunities have increased by 20% in
last
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five years.
Therefore
, the whole nation could acquire a major development.
Moreover
,
the
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universities in rich
countries
can award scholarships to talented students in poor
countries
. When these students graduate with excellent skills they can go back to their native country and serve the people as most of the poor
countries
do not have reputable universities.
As a result
, the number of
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skilled individuals,
such
as doctors and engineers will be increased, and they would be able to guide the nation
to
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the right direction. In conclusion, some people believe only financial aids do not wipe down the poverty of developing
countries
. I agree with
this
opinion as rich nations can extend their support by creating career opportunities and awarding scholarships to complete tertiary education.

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