Rich countries often give financial aid to poor countries, but it does not solve poverty. So rich countries should give other types of help to poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Even if developed
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offer financial support to developing
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poverty has remained
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a crucial problem in many
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, it is often argued by some that many other supports should be extended by rich nations to tackle
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problem. I completely agree with
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view and numerous approaches can be taken to effectively solve the problem.
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, one of the most effective solutions would be starting multinational companies in developing
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. It is
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well known
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fact that the unemployment rate is extensively higher in these poor
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. If rich nations can make
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amount of jobs the poor people definitely obtain several benefits.
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, in Sri Lanka, a lot of textiles companies are recently started
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China,
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, career opportunities have increased by 20% in
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five years.
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, the whole nation could acquire a major development.
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universities in rich
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can award scholarships to talented students in poor
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. When these students graduate with excellent skills they can go back to their native country and serve the people as most of the poor
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do not have reputable universities.
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skilled individuals,
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the right direction. In conclusion, some people believe only financial aids do not wipe down the poverty of developing
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. I agree with
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opinion as rich nations can extend their support by creating career opportunities and awarding scholarships to complete tertiary education.

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