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Multicultural societies, in which there is a mixture of different ethnic peoples, bring more benefits than drawbacks to a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#societies #mixture #peoples #country
Cosmopolitan countries or the countries that promote an inter-cultural environment are the pictures of today's era.
Moreover
, it helps a
country
 to build its economy stronger. I am inclined towards the aforementioned statement. As it brings more opportunities for society to learn things
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 global level.
This
 essay will share my viewpoints about it with a few examples.
Firstly
, if a
country
 encourages a multicultural society, it opens up a gate for other
people
 to come and work for the
country
. Ultimately, it helps the whole
country
 to grow along with the citizen.
For instance
,
Canada
 is one of the biggest examples As the government of
Canada
 is looking forward to taking approximately four lakh
people
this
 year.
Moreover
, there is
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 to get a permanent resident of
Canada
. And that's they make sure quality of professional are coming which will help them to grow.
Secondly
, because if
this
 new trend community
also
 learn to live with new
people
 from different cultures. And it
also
 helps an individual to adapt to a different culture. It is
also
 beneficial for the citizen of that
country
 who are travelling to another nation.
Thirdly
, It brings foreign investment to the
country
. Because of the frequent travel of different
people
 in the
,
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 it indirectly benefits the networking system.
For example
, In
Canada
 because of Multicultural society, companies are now investing as they know they will get the best of the employees. Because as I mentioned above that a candidate who is interested in permanent resident have to pass IELTS and must have a level of education.
Finally
,
people
 become more open-minded and there is no
such
 negative thinking as racism and casteism. It is the most imperative thing for a
country
 and for the community as well. To conclude,
this
 essay has shared my viewpoints and gave reasons as well. I believe, every government should promote it. Every
country
 must have new policies to set
this
 culture. It will help the whole world to grow at a rapid pace.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multiculturalism
  • cultural diversity
  • economic prosperity
  • social cohesion
  • integration
  • cultural assimilation
  • ethnic diversity
  • cultural exchange
  • global influence
  • inclusive governance
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