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Living in a country where you gave to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

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The bar chart provides information about the main exports in Southland in the period of 2000, 2022 and 2025. It can be seen from the graph that there was a steady rise in international tourism in comparison to meat products, which showed a decline in their numbers.
Moreover
, dairy products indicated some fluctuation. In 2000, approximately 8
billion
pound
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 contributed to international tourism, which was the highest export reason in that
year
.
Then
 it climbed
up
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to nearly £9
billion
 in 2000 and reached a peak of about 10 in the final
year
. Dairy products started at almost 7 at the beginning.
Afterward
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it
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, it showed a rapid increase to around 10
billion
, which reached the same rate as
ionternational
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international
 tourism in 2025.
Finally
, the number decreased slightly with 0,5 in the predicted
year
. Regarding meat export, in 2000 they shipped exactly 6
billion
 meat.
This
 figure fell to about 5,5 in 2022 and plunged to £ 5
billion
 in the
last
year
.
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