Living in a country where you gave to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The bar chart provides information about the main exports in Southland in the period of 2000, 2022 and 2025. It can be seen from the graph that there was a steady rise in international tourism in comparison to meat products, which showed a decline in their numbers.
Moreover
, dairy products indicated some fluctuation. In 2000, approximately 8
billion
pound
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contributed to international tourism, which was the highest export reason in that
year
.
Then
it climbed
up
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to nearly £9
billion
in 2000 and reached a peak of about 10 in the final
year
. Dairy products started at almost 7 at the beginning.
Afterward
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it
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, it showed a rapid increase to around 10
billion
, which reached the same rate as
ionternational
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tourism in 2025.
Finally
, the number decreased slightly with 0,5 in the predicted
year
. Regarding meat export, in 2000 they shipped exactly 6
billion
meat.
This
figure fell to about 5,5 in 2022 and plunged to £ 5
billion
in the
last
year
.

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